Nicly done, you managed to capture the darkness spot on. the only problem i have is that there is use of a "bad word" in this poem which should make it explicit..or swop the word for another equally powerful one and leave the poem in dark catergory.very well done though! IBE

This was so good Ben. I loved it. Just the way it is flawless. Maybe you should vent more often babe. This was very intense and so full of emotion. I love the title as well. Keep it up :) Nik

"like a black whole devouring a sun"

I think you meant "hole" here, other than that I thought this was a great dark piece, especially since you only consider it to be a vent (though isn't that what poetry is a lot of the time for some of us)

Nice work.