When my world start to surrender

^add an S so it reads when my world STARTS to surrender.

i cant hardly explain my feeling

^add another S so it reads explain my FEELINGS

since I lost you my world start to gray

^add TURN so it reads start to TURN gray.

other than those small things you did a wonderful job describing how you miss Gha. keep up the good work. thanks for sharing.
~Ben

Thank you...for correcting