by Cindy
Nik |
by Sylvia
Nik, God never forgets us no matter what. People around us might, but never Him, so you see you are not really lost. |
Really deep with emotion and it just showed through each word. Nothing I can say but a job well done. |
Very good Ms/ Nik |
I can't say enough about this dark poem, Though a rarely write frree flowing poems such as this I do enjoy reading a good one. |
Wow... this was really deep and sad it was so dark and powerful an image of realization but i have to say a few places seemed forced but it didnt take away from the poem |
I thought this line was very strong "I exist only to die all over again" Its almost like you understand that you'll love again but it'll surely be the same outcome. But just like somebody who can open our eyes to new worlds, that same somebody can save us from being lost. Great work 5/5 |
by Kuro
I really liked this. you did have a very effective word choice. and that made the feeling so much more intense, and all that went well with the imagery. A+ 5/5 for sure |
Very well expressed. This is so deep, so dark, so beautiful. I just love the way you have expressed yourself in such a moving manner. 5/5 |
by SolemnWish
This is deep. Its dark like luminescently dark but beautiful Nik. |
by Rocky
Again a very heartfelt piece. i can tell you put alot of yourself into your writing. but the flow and rythm were off. i am not talking about contrived flow and rythm, where each line only has a certain amount of sylables or whatever, but the natural rythm of speech. and the reason this bothers me is because there is nothing wrong in the words you used, but only in where you break up the sentances. because if i reread it but break up the sentances differently. it does have a natural flow to it. i think maybe you should read it aloud to see where the sentances should be broken up |
Overall i loved the poem and whole retrospect of it. What i didnt like was the way you set up your "stanzas". It seems like you just set it up that way because you think its the way a poem should be set up. Each line is like a small pause. For example |