This is also well expressed poems..

Great poem. The ending is a little bit stechy though. The ending doesn't really end the poem, it makes it sound like it still goes on. Good job though!

Nice poem, with nice rhymes.
The theme is something that most people can relate too, or will in the future.

You need at least four more lines to close the poem. It seem to be waiting for them.

try to end it with a non-question stanza.
a 'if you have then'

David

alright, thatnks for the comments, and you guys were right, it was lacking something, so i added to the end of it. And because this is a poem i wrote a while ago, and i dont feel this way anymore, i decided to make it more of a inspirational piece. hope you guys like!

hey nice poem!!! you got me again in the last part!!! i really like them!

another great1 and alot of ppl includeing me can probably relate to it i gave it a 5

i liked it, i like it alot lol. its written really well and it has a lot of meaning! i can/could also relate to this one as well! you should really persue poetry writting!
..sonya..