Raychil, I always really enjoy your writing because even though people have been hurt before, they see another side of hurting when they read something like this. You really write out to your readers how sucky feeling hurt is. You let people who havn't been hurt, see how it feels. That is something that makes a truly great writer; having someone else get something off of what you write. You did an excellent job writing this.

It turns into a ball
And eats away my heart
Though I stand whole and firm
My insides are torn apart

^Being hurt can be such a terrible feeling when you've had alot of it. You try so hard to put on a smile when it's actually eating you up inside. You did a great job explaining that.

It leaves nothing but despair
In its path of pure remorse
And all I can do is smile
While I let it run its course

^The worst thing about it is that you can't do anything to stop from feeling hurt. There's no treatment, and there's no given time that it will take to heal. You just have to continue to pretend. Again, great way to write it out

Excellent piece Raychil. 5/5

It turns into a ball
And eats away my heart
Though I stand whole and firm
My insides are torn apart

I loved this stanza soo much, I've heard the meaning behind this so much in poems, but I loved how you worded it, it was amazing!!

thanks for your comment, im glad im writing again too

<3