I like it. It flows nice. You were thinking about me werent you lol :p. Im jk. Good job hun

First off, thanks for the comment you gave on one of my poems :]

second of all, this piece is flawless. I can also see the emotion you put into this, which is like you said a very important thing for the author to be able to do. and the rhyme is just like the cherry on top. great job! :]