That was very excellent indeed. I loved the repition through out. Some try to use it and it just doesnt work well, but this definetley did. And i didnt quite expect the ending but i loved it none the less. A well deserved 5/5

Aww.
That's really good :)
It has the effect of sounding like a love story;
Then ends with tradgety!
;) Love it.

5/5