I thought it was a great reply to the shepard. It was a unique let down towards him. The flow was off in a few parts but it was still an easy read. I also thought that alot the rhyming didnt work, or that you rhymed in some areas then some not in some. But i still loved it and i think it deserves a 5/5

It was really good i thought it flowed pretty well and the picture piece imagery was amazing great job

I can't find anything wong with this well written poem. It was a very suitable reply and an eloquent dicline on the offer

I actually really enjoyed this poem it was very UNIQUE, very different as well, I even voted for it as poem of the week, thats how good I thought it was, excellent job!! 5/5

You offer me those sparkling diamonds,
So what is that you hide behind them?
You try woe me with all your treasures,
Why not with more loving measures ?

my fav stanza. finally a long poem that didnt boar me. great job and great flow i love it. thanks for a great write :)

Wow i LOVED this piece, the way you described the traping and the wooing of the heart was very much realistic. and that you could talk and write a response to one poem that another person had written, and be it that you may not have even been inspired by said poem, and make it so much your own. I could see all te visuals as you were giving them as well.

my favorite lines were:

But so much land means too much work,
And all that time you're just not worth.
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You offer me those sparkling diamonds,
So what is that you hide behind them?
You try woe me with all your treasures,
Why not with more loving measures ?

there wa sonly one thing that i spotted that I thought could be improved it was in these lines: I'm not that young or that naive;
Your trap just don't appeal to me << i thought it could be better worded by saying Doesn't

5/5 i look 4 ward to reading more!!

Sensational!!! I actually posted my previous comment to you before I read this, but your part of the poem reinforces what I was referring to. Still, I appreciate the verbiage and the impact behind your prose. You're rebuttal was glorious! You got my 5!

Haha! i really liked your response to the first poem! i think you did a great job with it and I thoroughly enjoyed it. :)

Wow. Amazing write. The flow was excellent and I loved the entertainment through the voice. You are a very talented writer. Very good job. 5/5

The reply to the poem was good. It is a very blunt let down and a very nice write. I truly enjoyed reading it. You are an excellent poet. 5/5

Wow. this was trully amazing. i love this reply. i love how you rhyme and how this flows. this is my favorite of the three that i have read. ur a great writer and it standss out dont let anyone take this from you. great job.

I loved how unique this was. Its so different to wha i normally read. And seriously, you have talent. Every poem of yours that i have read so far i have LOVED! lol. It flows so...perfectly and the rhyme scheme was great, your choice of wording was once again, well picked. I really have nothing bad to say about this wonderful write. I really loved reading it. =) 5/5

Omg wow... you have some great talent, like seriously, this poem was so good. it flowed smoothly and the reply fit perfect. iloved it hun