The imagery and flow takes me there in my mind

Well done

That is really good, I love how it tells a story while leading all off the first line.

5/5, I wouldn't change anything... Except to me, colour is spelt wrong:P:P lol

For a second i felt like i was in a land of skittles lol. wise words from grandma. well done. 5/5 who cares what you misspelled, what matters is i understood you. thats poetry. you have an amazing imagination

I thought it was a really great poem, and i agree its almost like speaking of skittles, i thought it was amazing imagery and the total idea of the work was great. Nice work, 5/5