When You're Gone

Uplifting and spirtitual ! This poem is a long defintion of hope and a path to self-fulfillment.

Wow this was amazing i've had a rough day already and the day has only just started. I had suicide on my mind and this changed the dark hours. I'm bracing myself for the worst. Thanks so much. I loved it. It's saved as one of my favourite poems. Keep it up. Much love kelsea. xo

I liked this one a lot, Sourav..wise words we should all head.. the only thing I was not keen about is this:

Pick the flower of love, don't buy thorn of sorrow
If you harvest well, the greener will be tomorrow

^^
this is very forced rhyming, I would just end it like: the greener your tomorow will be.

It is far better to not rhyme than to make it a forced rhyme. Rhyming is not crucial in poems, not at all;)

Well done nonetheless.

God bless,

5/5 Ingrid

//Dawn has brought, may be a new surprise//

^^ even i wait for surprise each dawn :) lovely line :)

//You cried yesterday- and yesterday has died
Today is a new day, time for a fresh new ride//

^^ very motivating lines these are... tears do not last long... let each day be a new day :)

//Pick the flower of love, don't buy thorn of sorrow
If you harvest well, the greener will be tomorrow//

^^ just loved the feel of it... to invest more on smiles than on sorrows... well penned :)

//Past is a shadow; in present the future born
Your deeds will talk for you, when you're gone. //

^^brilliantly penned... the message is loud and clear... beautifully ended... indeed our deeds will story even after we are gone...

wonderful write :)

I am glad that i didnt missed this beautiful poem. This one is a powerful package, it has it all one could ask for. Loved the theme, the message and the flow and moreover the way you said it all...just awesome.

all the best and take care