by Broken Masquerade
I really like this so far :) it's like a love story and captivates you from the beginning. you're a very talented writer :) well done :) 5/5 |
by Hollymariee
It's definately lyrical . You should seperate the word "noone" , because i thought it was a different word entirely at first . I don't like the cake line , it's kind of really cheesy . I think you can do alot with this , i like your idea but there is still alot of work to be put into it . 4/5 |
Well written, I like how its not to sappy and you put just the right amount of emotion in it. |
by Mr Rhee
I like the way this flows, and it flows so well. It doesn't jump, it carries. Awsome piece. |
I enjoyed it! i cant wait to read the next part. :) |
by Sumit Ojha
Excellent poem...i have no words to explain... I gives you 5 on 5 (5/5) because there is on way to give more points to a poem. |
I find this poem very exciting with very romantic imagery. I also sense a personal touch |
by Gasttlee
"But not to worry because I've got a plan |
by East Poetry
Very very cool. this must have been a fun poem for you to write. I favorite part in this is, |
Ok i like its its really sweet and the end take a walk with me was my favorite its adorable!!! |