Comments : Immortal Pain

  • 14 years ago

    by DarkCrystalbtrfy

    NO no !! its perfect the way it is. Not all poems have to be long. for instance I wrote Black and its an anagram and it only has 5 lines. but yes this I loved, the darkness in it just wowed me. You really took the words and made them your own.

    my favorite lines were:

    tortured thoughts and immortal pain
    &&
    Tranquil thoughts, less and less

    More more!
    6/5