Once again amazing! Bravo! I only saw one thing I thought you could put in and it was a comma in between: beauty is never a need it is never mandatory,
Then again maby u did that on porupos? (lol cant spell)

My favorite lines were:

i want to know what shes doing every moment of the week,
who is she with? with whom shall she speak?

I find that this is so true, whenever you like someone you think about that person quite a lot and your wondering those types of things. I also like the way you worded these lines with the question marks.

6/5 = )

cant wait to see more! keep em comming!

The flow was good. Easy to read. I think that you expressed very well how easy it is to get caught up in someones looks. For some people anyway. I tend to find the heart of someone more beautiful than most anyone's outer appearance.

"if she did not have beauty would i honestly be this way?
would i be so possessive? would i be with her today?"

How WOULD you answer that?

I have known and loved some truly beautiful people who's outward appearance werent what would be considered the accepted norm of beautiful. Their essence and their heart made them the most beautiful person in my eyes.

I liked the poem. It had creativity and you could sense the underlying torment felt...I gave you a 5. Good job.

I like it , but if you're really dateing the girl yes , you may have crossed the line . Well done though , I don't have any suggestions . Your rhymes and rhythm are all good .

Short and sweet!
Really nice poem from start to end. Keep up this good work (5/5)

Short and sweet!
Really nice poem from start to end. Keep up this good work (5/5)

This poem is rlly sweet!
i love the wayy it flows adn it sounds very sincere:]
loved it!
5/5

The poem is nice,what i liked most that it is confusing ,first two stanzas is just about beauty,and the last ones about that you're in love with a beautiful lady.Interesting.
Even though it was short,i liked its composition and the words,i even could imagine the scene :)
5/5

Wonderfully written :) Though I would like to make a few suggestions:

Beauty is respected, beauty is wanted
beauty is a blessing, beauty is flaunted,
"beauty is never a need it is never mandatory,"
beauty gives you confidence, a sense of self glory,
^^You should add a comma in the third line after 'need' to create a pause. Without it, the reader will just read on like it is a complete sentence, and it messes with the flow

it makes me possessive, it makes me insecure
to have someone so beautiful makes me obscure,
if she did not have beauty would i honestly be this way?
would i be so possessive? would i be with her today?
^^My favorite stanza. I love how you asked questions throught this write. It makes me think about the confusion of the writer; and it also gives a voice to the poem.

i want to know what shes doing every moment of the week,
who is she with? with whom shall she speak?
is she thinking of me? why wont she text back?
god i feel like a stalker, but how else to react?
^^perfect!

her beauty drives me nuts, i want her only to be mine,
i hope she doesn't think I'm psycho, did i already cross that line?
"by reading this poem I've probably giving you the impression,"
that beauty is just a mere obsession..
^^the third line/sentence: 'giving' should be 'given'

Overall, you did a great job with the flow and rhyme. I also liked the fact that you didnt try to use big words in order to create some sort of voice; but instead you kept it simple and sweet, saying what needed to be said. So I believe that this deserves a 5.

Good job

Kay Jay