Broken Boys and Broken Girls

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Woah i loved this poem, especially the repetition of the verse;
All around the freaking world:
Broken boys and broken girls.
Cut the wires to my brain,
remembering the dreams I've slain.

having it at the start and the end tied the poem together, loved the flow and rhyme scheme. 5/5

This is a freaking good poem :D
maybe i havent read your stuff lately
but this seemed much different then anything
i read by you before, this seemed i dont know
more abrupt i guess :P
not in a bad way dw
very nice short poem i love it
keep em comin :D

Keenan

This is something interesting. I like how you compose this poem especially the 2nd stanza on how you wish you could take back all your wishes(This how i interpret it). I actually had a mental motion picture in mind when i read the lines in the 3rd stanza, where a there's a person putting a flower on a grave except it's all in a reverse chronological order. It's also interesting how you reused the 1st stanza as your last stanza.It really does work for me. I think you've done a great job writing this poem. Keep pouring your brilliant ideas out;)