It seems to me you made this difficult free verse style work so well with breath taking imagery.

This is very dark...i like the last stanza becuase it is a little different. its very sad and i hope this isnt literal

Ok....
I just added you as a favorite Author.

for the first time, the idea of why poeple kill....uhhh makes evil sence to me.

very disturbing yet interesting. lol

nice

of mine, Read

unexpected downfall

I like the darkness of it. Not sayin i completely understand but i think that was ur point. it was a great style.

good job.

victoria

Wow awesome imagery.

"My reddened palms glisten slightly in
the waining sunlight, when I turn
them...this way and that way."
Change waining to waning.

"Blood can be somewhat pretty, sometimes,"
I think it would be better if you remove sometimes, 'cause you already used somewhat. I think it'll flow better, just a suggestion, though.

Other than that, this is really amazing :) I have to ask where you got your inspiration for this piece. Was it in a novel? Sometimes I write based on novels. Or maybe a movie?

I really enjoyed reading this. It was like reading a part of a novel when the protagonist kills someone, but didn't mean to, maybe for self defense. Anyway, great piece 5/5 :) Keep writing!

-X