by WakingFreedom Dec 7, 2009
category :
Life, society /
other
I want everything to be right again |
These are very thought provoking dark thoughts expressed so eloquently and perfectly poetic. I am impressed |
by Hollymariee
Your rhymes could be better .. Instead of rhyming it with it , you could find another word , as well as make the other stanzas rhyme as well . The lack of the scheme throws off the flow a bit but it's not a big deal . I really like the content , and still 5/5 |
"But these are just wants trapped inside my head" |