My Last Lullaby

by P00ki3B3ar   Dec 7, 2009


I feel so numb,
I must be dumb,
I feel so lame,
I feel like everythings just a game.

Wheres the fame?
Wheres the way?
I want to go away,
Take me to a better pain

I hate this everyday,
Its always the same,
This is so plain.

I'm never glad,
I'm always sad,
My head up inside the clouds,
Drowning in the frowns.

Wheres the clowns?
To frighten all the fears around,
Say goodbye cause this is my last lullaby.

*plz comment i haven't wrote anything in a while*

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  • 13 years ago

    by Amreen

    I liked the poem...It has a deep meaning to it if read deeply...:)I would love it if u read n comment my poems as well...:)

  • 14 years ago

    by ShIsAnA tHe OnE aNd OnLy

    I like this. But it would be better if you change it a little bit like by putting"," or "." were they should be. that would help alot other then that grat job. 4/5 return the favor thx.

  • 14 years ago

    by Poetic Justice

    I, personally, liked your switch on rhyme scheme. It gives the poem a very nice flow and doesn't seem forced. Great job!

  • 14 years ago

    by KJ

    Very good job. Although I have a few suggestions:

    "I feel like everythings just a game."
    ^^change everythings to everything's

    "Wheres the fame?
    Wheres the way?
    I want to go away,
    Take me to a better pain"
    ^^Wheres should be where's or where is"

    "I hate this everyday,
    Its always the same,
    This is so plain."
    ^^everyday should be every day

    I dont know if you meant to have those words written that way, I was just pointing them out. But other than those minor mistakes, I believe that this was an all around good poem. The emotion was great. 4/5

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