Comments : End of the Road

  • 14 years ago

    by mandy

    Life is so simply complicated
    Souls, bodies, minds; all mashed into one
    Separate ideals yet related

    - The first line is a wonderful opener! "simply complicated", so well put. I believe I have a quote like that. :)

    Grasp at the daylight, reach for the sun
    Smile brightly to begin each day
    Socialize with friends, speak out for fun

    - You paint a very happy picture here. It reminds me of the summer.

    Care for strangers, console their dismay
    Thank for laughter, and kindness bestowed
    Appreciate the people who stay

    -"Appreciate the people who stay"; that's my favorite line.

    Remember the gratitude you owed
    Knowledge is power, so study well
    Pass the test at the end of the road

    - These ending lines are great! I love your choice of words!

    "Pass the test at the end of the road"
    I like how the ending has the word "end" at it. It's like your poem was a real life time, someone whith experience, who is now passing on the lesson.

    Wonderful write! 5/5

    mandy

  • 14 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow... this is beautiful and inspiring. I love the message behind this poem. Very well-written! Great job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Run out of words

    I loved it :)
    my favorite part was : Knowledge is power, so study well.
    (Y) nice :)

  • 14 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    I just reread this poem and I still got the same feeling... I love it! It's filled with inspiration and joy... It makes me want to enjoy life even more, even when I'm doing simple things people usually don't think twice about. Wonderful write!