by East Poetry Dec 8, 2009
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
To little to late, |
by Mello193
This was great. i agree with this. the person in this poem is probably not that good and have done some messed up stuff. i think of this as a continuation to giving. maybe?? still good write and damn good read. |
The flow was a bit rocky in places and kind of threw me off a bit at times. Hurtfully I guess can be considered a word by some but it just sounds so terrible the way you said it. "To shield against hurtfully things"? Why not say to shield against hurtful things? That sounds much better haha I thought this was good but your other work is much better I gave this an honest 4/5 |
Unfortunately as you have found life is not always a joyous place and hurt and failure are all apart of it. So I to have known those quirks and can sympathise with the grudge you hold though to step on one day you must let it go it will make you a much better man. |
by Sylvia
Just found your poems and I'm glad I did. I enjoyed reading this. Sometimes I think it does us good to hold a grudge, at least for a little while. Well done. |