An ode to my swing set

by Katie B.   Jun 16, 2004


They chopped you up and took you away
You were old and rusty worn out from to much play
i will miss are time together you were so much fun
You have gone to a better place
The big Play Ground in the sky
As the years pasted i could see you were worn out and broken beyond repair
You are replaced now with a new swing set, which isn't fair but i will live because i am in deed to old to play.I will always remember you, rusty old swing set

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  • 20 years ago

    by CC

    vetry cute but I agree with Jeri... jsut work on it a lil but its a very cute poem and I think its the best yet.. its so original!!!!!!!!!1111

  • 20 years ago

    by Jeri

    I like your poem, but i feel that it could use some work. For me, it didnt flow very well. I think that if you revised your syllable count, you could make it flow alot better. Other than that, you also need to decided if you want it to rhyme or not, becasue right now, it is all over the place. I think that is it, but if this is worked on, it could turn into a really great poem!

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