A single tear stain, Upon an empty page
by Rocky Dec 10, 2009
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(this is a poem about a poem i couldnt write) |
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14 years ago
by Sunshine
Why do i see self here...anyway brilliant work..was worth reading i assure u..tho cloudy and affected me..loves this one too
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14 years ago
by Lady Nik
This was good juste very wordy. I think you could have gottne your point across with less words. I felt your imagery was very strong nd made this piece come to life. I'm not use to this type of style maybe that's why I had a hard time reading this, but I did enjoy it as a whole. I'm maybe work on revising it and making it more concise. But keep it up though. Nik
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14 years ago
by Gasttlee
I can say this is a deep poem and it's appealing because I can relate to it. In fact, I think many people can relate to it. Normally, I would say something like this is almost too long, but here because you capture such emotion, it doesn't matter because you effectively get your message across.
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14 years ago
by KJ
First: I just want to say thank you for your honest opinion on my work. That is why I truely became a member of P&Q; to get feedback and suggestions on my work (to become a better poet). So I just wanted to let you know that I appreciate your honesty.
Now, to your work :)
This was a very long poem, but there wasnt a moment when I felt like: this is too long, I'm not gonna finish it. It caught and held my attention from start to finish and that is what really did it for me. The emotion was raw and I could almost hear the voice of the poet. Very good write. Also, the format was very simple, as well as your choice of vocabulary. So overall, I will have to be completely <honest> and say that this write deserves a 5.
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14 years ago
This to me is a very unusual style that would require more discipline than I may have to imitate, but I would not change a thing
