Beginning of the End

by Lu   Dec 12, 2009


Beginning of the End

All stood still
for that one brief moment
when your lips met mine.
And two became one
in a vow of forever.

Decades passed as time drizzled
through the hourglass.
Life became a highway of
adventures, skid marks,
crashes and eventually death.

And then ...
All stood still

R.T.V.W Club exercise ...
This is a Circular poem.
A short poem that begins and ends with the same line.
The reader should feel differently about the line the second time around because of what has happened in the poem.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I just realized you wrote a bit on the bottom explaining about the club challenge and I see now. You were very unique in writing this and it did make me feel different the second time around, less hopeful, feeled with the sense of death. Good job!

    Take care.

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This was such an original poem and I liked your style that held the reader's attention. The power behind your words striked me and gave me a meaning to ponder over. Thanks for sharing.

    Congratulations on the well-deserved win!

    God bless you and Merry Christmas!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 15 years ago

    by Kuro

    Hmm. this sounds like an interesting and fun way to write. i might try this sometime. thanks for the idea. and i see what you mean about the 2nd time you read. gives it different meaning and whatnot. nicely done
    ~Ben

  • 15 years ago

    by shlok

    This is one of the master piece Luanne...it inspires my thought process...keep it up..good work..surelly deserves 5/5.

    love shlok

  • 15 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Aww... beautiful! I love the meaning and loved the circular structure! Congrats on the win :)

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