Probably one of the most unique forms I've seen. I really loved this -- you used the form perfectly. The poem starts out and the first line gives you an idea about what the poem will be about but then it takes a major turn and the ending is completely different. Awesome job.. what a unique piece.

I thought you did great with this Luanne! I am going to give it a try, I always have trouble with repeating lines, but you did it nicely, as well as the change between stanzas that leads you to view the line in 2 different ways. You have an extra word in your title though lol great work hun!

Um. yes i felt very different wow. that was good that makes me want to try one lol.

Beautiful piece Luu...Short yet filled with vivid emotions..Loved the form and i know i should try it too..muahzz...

Love this form and the circular thought processes...I like the hourglass insertion and even though short...life and death in a perfect circle!

I like the form and the poem. I did feel different at the beginning and the end. It once again proves that you don't need lots of words to send a powerful message. Well done.

Luanne
The form is wonderful. Brought tears to my eyes when I read it. You always have that effect on me when I read your writing.
Excellent job!

Aww... beautiful! I love the meaning and loved the circular structure! Congrats on the win :)

This is one of the master piece Luanne...it inspires my thought process...keep it up..good work..surelly deserves 5/5.

love shlok

Hmm. this sounds like an interesting and fun way to write. i might try this sometime. thanks for the idea. and i see what you mean about the 2nd time you read. gives it different meaning and whatnot. nicely done
~Ben

This was such an original poem and I liked your style that held the reader's attention. The power behind your words striked me and gave me a meaning to ponder over. Thanks for sharing.

Congratulations on the well-deserved win!

God bless you and Merry Christmas!

~MaryAnne

I just realized you wrote a bit on the bottom explaining about the club challenge and I see now. You were very unique in writing this and it did make me feel different the second time around, less hopeful, feeled with the sense of death. Good job!

Take care.

~MaryAnne