I've found this a very hard poem to comment on. i think it is because i have had to read it a few times to have some idea of the allegory you have used in it. which is a good thing as many poems are just so simple or meaningless and filled with cliches, that they are not very interesting at all.
the only negative thing i can really say about it is that in a few lines the flow was thrown a bit off as i read it aloud. but that may just be the way i read it. otherwise i really liked the poem, the style you writ it in is refreshingly oiginal. i like how you have decided to say what you wanted to say instead of trying to fit what you wanted to say in a rhyme scheme. also how you have repeated certain words in brackets is very effective. i think i may have to remember that when i write some new poems. and as for the allegory, it seems to me you have used riding in a car to a relationship. and christmas as the goal your driving towards, as christmass is traditionaly related to comfort and love and happiness and maybe even a family etc. but it seems you are both falling asleep and forgetting this, heading towards fights and a break up. i especially liked "wake up, James, you're falling asleep,
your heart's no longer beating;" it seems he is forgetting how much he loves you and is falling asleep and your trying to get him to wake up before it is to late. maybe i am wrong in how i read the allegory in this poem but i dont think so. so very good poem. i really liked it