In Between Dreams

Ah, this poem is gorgeous!

"I study your heartbeat.
Its steady rhythm sweeps
drowsy waves over me
putting my mind at ease."

^^ That is my favourite part. Something about it is just so beautiful and adds so much to the piece as a whole.

There is honestly nothing negative I can say about this whatsoever. I adore when the vocabulary can be relatively simplistic, but still get your emotions across so easily.

A beautiful piece.

-Briana

I loved reading this and you are very talented! never stop writing! would you please read and comment on my "scars" poem?? i would love some feedback.

This first stanza..... simply made my jaw drop. I read it twice and knew that the rest of this poems was going to be very very good.

.... and it was. I cant wait to meet someone that can appreciate me enough to write a poem like that for me.

A nice written poem, still has a long way to go. The structure is a basic 4 lined stanza.
I found it difficult to find a rhyming scheme. Usually, in this kind of poems, it's either aabb or abab, but here I see neither.
The metaphors and images you painted is probably your main acheivment in this piece, as I could see the pictures in the stanzas while I read them.
There were some broken lines there that cut the flow, for example:

ebbs and tides that light you
up, even in this shade.

Here you cut the sentence in the middle. Instead of cutting it near the end, to emphasize.

"soothing my chill-ed bones"
Here I'd use shivering instead of chilled, it helps the flow.

A nice try though, just follow what I said and it could be a great poem. 4/5 , Better luck next time!

Excellent and full with love. Flow is okay but story is awesome... Keep up this good work (5/5)