Ahh. Beautifully written piece. So true on so many levels. The rhyme was untouchable!

'It's societies way of keeping well rounded'

^^'societies' should be 'society's'

Overall amazing read. Thank you for writing such a great poem.

5/5

This was good :) Flawless flow and interesting tale. I think you did a wonderful job with this piece. Keep it up :) Nik

I liked this. It was written well and had a good flow. From memory, your poems normally had more emotion than this. But I still like this one :) well done 5/5

I liked this. It was written well and had a good flow. From memory, your poems normally had more emotion than this. But I still like this one :) well done 5/5

A very nice poem, with a unique style of writing. I liked the change in the rhyming scheme between the first and second stanzas. The subject is a very popular one... What happens after we die?
You raise some interesting questions as well like: If only the strong survive, does it matter? I'll die like all of us in the end...

The rhyms keep the flow throughout the whole piece, and the words fit to the point in the best way.

A very good work, enjoyed reading it 5/5