Wow, that's deep. Good work, Ashley

The first stanza of this poem was really powerful and catchy to me. but alot of the rest of it just seemed a bit disconected . there was the general theme in it but from stanza to stanza i felt it jumped too much. it had emotion in it but wasnt unified enough for my liking

"Consuming he slowly" he should be her i think

Aww Ash :( this waqs sad but very well written. I've missed your work. Keep it up dear. You never fail to amaze me. Nik

This was very dark & powerful. Each stanza brought something new to the poem as a whole. Looks to me as though youve improved a lot with your poetry. Well done..

A very dark and unique write that kept me enthralled; well done. Another fine piece.
All the best,
Ben