Wow, intense love and affection, with the feeling of "wanting" mixed in there. Good write it was refreshing :) 5/5

-laura

This was okay. I'd like to see you try some other styles of poetry. Maybe free verse or a haiku. I feel like your feelings are confined when you have to rhyme. Other than that I liked it. I think you did a good job with telling us how you feel. Nik