Wow. this is really powerful. the beginning was not an attention grabber but as you read on you need to finish. is this a true story?

I remember the day
Christmas day went away

i would reword this it is kinda repetitive

other than that i still love this poem

Well attention grabber this one as you read on even better loved this and if its a true story my sympathy too......Nobody deserves life like that .....But enjoyed it alot

This is a really emotional poem, I hope it wasn't true because that would be so horrible, that you've had to go through all this. Written well by all means, 5/5. Em

Great poem! Merry Christmas by the way. I hope this poem wasnt based on this Xmas. Or any Xmas for that matter. My Xmas wasnt so great. I havent had a decent Xmas in YEARS. Next year is going to be a lot better. Im moving out of Cali soon. Nothin for me here. Things will be better. It just takes time...

CY, I am not a fan of dark pieces such as this but I am now. Its a horrible story. And it affected me so much...my heart is torn into pieces.