by Ingrid
Tabi, |
by Ixora
Great job on this poem I did mind the length at all as it kept my attention throughout. The emotions are almost tangiable and you speak of things unique to yourself but that can clearly connect to other readers. |
I personally think pain and failure are two very key elements of growth. You learn more as you suffer and fail and it makes you stronger in the end. I enjoy your writing but sometimes I feel your trying to be to"impressive" with the words you use. Its almost as if you complicate your poems with unnecessary vocabulary. Sometimes just keeping things simple makes the poem that much stronger and impressive. Well done none the less |