Aww..Bravo!! you manage to let me feel the heaviness behind this piece...A short story was smartly narrated and vividly emblazoned in front of my eyes...Superb ending too! Glad i read this, it's true this piece is different with how i portrayed mine but Dear it's the emotions and the depths and breadths of your imagination that matters..So well done on this..

Hi, a very personal and emotional narative i think?Well done you for sharing this hurtful piece, x p

It shows alot of emotions that u have in thiss.. broekn relationships with family is always hard but the "scars" will fade in time.

i would intensify the first stanza so people would keep reading. other than that i like it. good job.

This free flowing poem really moved me. It is like reading a part of a novel where many emotions and questions meet and merge in a myrteriuos tragidy

Wow. Amazing job. I must say, I wasnt expecting such an emotional and real piece such as this. You did an excellent job with the imagery. The voice was so clear and evident; that of a torn and tattered girl. I would not change a thing about this poem. It was beautiful and perfect all in its own. Very good write.
5/5

Wow. Such personal pain. Great imagery, and your feelings were deeply felt by this reader. Thanks for suggesting it to me. A very good job.

I love the flowing style, its so free but not careless it has a point, a direction that interests me. This is individual and shows more emotion then ive seen in a long time. Great job, keep them coming 5/5

Wow thats was amazing :)
the imagery was superb

I can really relate to this piece. I felt you weren't afraid to get your feelings out there. This was very intense and so well crafted. Nice work. Nik

Such a strong write full of emotion & was a interesting way to write this... in more of a story form. You can feel the emotions the writer is feeling as you read this. They were truly effective.

Good poem. I could totally picture the poem in my mind like I was right there. Keep up the good work.

I thought the first half was amazing as anytthing. It held some great imagery and i loved the flow of it. Thought i wasnt as fond of the second half though. I thought it had gotten a little confusing and kind of cliche in a sense. But overall a really good write. A well deserved 5/5.

This was def deep. i'm glad you shared. brings back some pushed aside memories. great poem.

Your right your a very deep pretty person... you have an excellent idea representing your poem.. if you have a problem i wish you can solve it as fast as you want it..

Magnificant.. from the opening 3 lines, i just fell in loved,you're choice of words suit this poem..cold wooden door. very deep but insightful poem i like it

Gosh your a sad pants Kalli. what's so sad about it all is how you don't deserve any of this ill-treatment. regarding the poem though, i love the last line, it is so true. the part about the family he never took the time to know makes me so incredibly sad. the thing about your poems is that they seldom rhyme but they move like seriously. they are tangible and i drift into them. Buddy is freakin out right now! lol

I love the flow of this poem...very touching...5/5

I love the flow of this poem...very touching...5/5

I don't even know where to start. This piece really got to me.. I read and re-read it just to make sure that the emotions didn't fade after reading over your words a few times. I think the emotion and just the way you wrote this made the piece successful and powerful. I'm going to assume this is most likely written from personal experience... It fits my profile almost 100% as well. That's most likely why it's gets to me so much but regardless.. Amazing job!!

This is very sad and very deep, very moving, good job!!