I really like this! I like how you describe your love and how you feel! Its greay keep it up!

My favorite line,

The sultry sound in her voice,

I really enjoyed this whole poem. I loved your choice of words through out. Great job.

I think you covered all the bases of the mind heart and soul. I feel the flow was free and I would not change a thing

I really loved reading this one as well. it's perfect! great job! very cute too. :)

She is my fresh breath of air.

*I didn't really lik this line. I'd maybe say "She's that fresh breathe of air" that way it flows into the next line better*

The lungs in my body.
I cannot see me witout her;

*I'd change this line to "I can't see myself without her" saying "me" makes it hard to read*

I am blind, entirely.
And on my darkest days
she somehow keeps me sane.

*I like this line but ti doesn't seem to fit what you've said above. maybe "she somehow makes me see" that you it relates to tthe being blind part*

Showering me with her love,
takes away the pain.
Her smile alone is enough
to make my heart skip a beat.
And when she is away,

*Instead of saying "and when" I'd say "whenever" *

I feel only half complete.
The sultry sound in her voice,

*I like the alliteration here*

sends lovely chills down my spine.
I feel as if I'm in heaven,
for she has me up so high.
Sometimes I wonder
what I've done to deserve her.
I couldn't ask for more;

*Not sure why you have the semicolon there, it's unneeded*

she is the perfect lover.

*I think you did an okay job with this. This wasn't my fav from you, but it's always nice to read some sweet words about a loved one. I'm sure she loved this piece. Keep it up hun. Nik*

You say its probably not one of your best but i thought this was really really good though. It flowed amazingly and there was a little rhyming here or there but it all fit perfectly. Well done job 5/5

No, it dosen't seem like this was thought out at all. but sometimes that's how poems are, just blind words. and, in this case, it worked very well. i do the same thing where i have to write something down really quick after i listen to a song of watch a movie.

Hmm, This was really good. Very good expression of emotion, and it kinda makes me want to cuddle hahaha. Anyways keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more.

RTVW

I go along with the flow and enjoyed this poem very much those exceptional poems sometimes come quickly and are work that comes screaming from the heart when something inspires I would not alter a word as it stand excellent in my mind Ray S 5/5

Absolutely wonderful. This poem has so much emotion and depth, not to mention great rhyming. 5/5, a perfect read.

Aww! Sooo cute. She is a lucky girl to have someone like you to write about her :) and she's also quite lucky to have someone like you love her.

And on my darkest days
she somehow keeps me sane.
Showering me with her love,
takes away the pain

^It's so amazing how that special someone can just take the hurt right out of you when you're with him/her. And, it's wonderful to have that because you're so much happier!

Sometimes I wonder
what I've done to deserve her.
I couldn't ask for more,
she is the perfect lover.

^So cute! Also, this is the perfect ending!

One of my favorite parts of this poem was really the word choice. You came up with the words that worked the best in this poem, which is somethiny many people don't consider when they write a poem. Luckily, you did. And it turned out delightful!

5/5, you are quite the talented writer :)

I feel this way about my fiancee. She is the air I breathe and everything I need to survive in this world. When you're madly in love with somebody no days are bad anymore because you have someone to make you smile and to keep the world amazing...your would atleast. Excellent job expressing love as always 5/5