Very good, id consider making this longer, good structuer everthing has good flow and wasnt hard to follow at all, id get rid of the slash marks though, it doesnt make it look too pleasing to the eyes.

In the harmony do we all assume
That eternity leads only to doom?

^^so true.

I love the fact that all your poetry is so in depth. You did a great job with the format and rhyme scheme. All your writes are a pleasure to read.

5/5