A wonderful form & you did extremely well with it. Very interesting write, there is so much power in the few words youve wrote here. Nicely done.

I like the pattern that was used for this poem. It looks easy, but i guess it must have took you quite something to get it mirrored and meaningful at the same time. Clever choice of words. Excellent work

Lu,

I was really impressed when I first read this poem by you. It was different because the
darkness you etched within it. Usually you write such beautiful love and sad poems and I
don't read too many dark poetry from you. The style was impressive and your word choice
combined well to create such a stunning poem. Dark is my favorite so I loved you pulled
this off so well.

I loved your word choice, Fluttering, Palpitating, inflict. They are all such strong words.
I believe by using these words you were able to convey such a strong meaning within your
poem. I found this poem absolutely beautiful because it was so rich if you know what I mean
I felt it was such a thick and rich poem.. That just oozed power. Sounds like i'm describing
a chocolate doesn't it haha..

Overall this was excellent. Such an elegant dark poem, I can't say much more then that as I believe everything was really Well done. Such an enjoyable read and clever too.

-Mel

Luanne
your really putting out the forms. At first I didn't think I'd seen this one before. Then I remembered Gem did one. You pulled this off so well. Great word choices gave this a very dark feel.
Excellent!
Take Care
*hugs
Cindy