Very good, i love it :) lots of emotion. keep up the good work
5/5
~KiKi

I enjoyed this very much...the story builds to bring curiosity to the reader, as to what is causing the pain. The ending to some might seem anti-climatic, unless of course you've been there! An excellent read!

I wasn't a fan of the style in which you wrote this in, it seemed a bit choppy and your syntax ruined the flow a little. But I did think you expressed your feelings clearly and deeply, allowing the reader to feel your pain and see into your head and heart. I think you really used your title in the piece well, the imagery you used was very strong. Nice work dear :) Nik

Your poem is just phenominal... wonderful, you made me cry and tears came streaming on my cheaks while my heart felt cramped inside a small box squeezed in my cheat. The reason is the way you wrote it, you made me keep high expectations and a wonderful image of happiness then my world came crashing down because of how you then described your feelings... makes you live the poem, imagine how it feels to be in a season of joy and see it in front of you yet you don't feel the season because your thoughts are somewhere else... truly a great write, keep it up.

I liked the simplicity of this piece..It made me feel the every emotions entailed in this piece..

At long winded way to get across unrequited love it could have been two separate poems almost. Yet unique in its own way and you got your message across so vividly, well written though and excellent in the way you drew me your reader in and then fired off its true meaning, 5/5 Ray S

Heartbreaking write , it really was :(

Excellent details in this! I was picturing every single line I read. Some people don't captivate the readers attention with details that well, I thought you did great with that!
I really enjoyed this write!

Has this actually happened to you, you make it so true and real. It was like a very descriptive story. enjoyd very much so.
5/5

Your poem is so simple but it has something so touching.. The pain and every emotion is so distinct and i can really feel it..
Keep up the good work ..