Alison Part 3 Final

Cool string. I like reading acrostic poems, i have one on here, and the fact that you used the same acronym for all yet changed the lines as in a progressing story is something seldom seen. Great Job!

Not all poems need a twist, I dont think this one needs it, its perfect the way it is. Theres really nothing else I can say, your poems are excellently written with great imagery and very powerful. Your very talented, cant wait to read more!

The series of Alison poems are absolutely beautiful. i wish I had half the writing chops you have, my friend. :)

keep writing.

:)

"Alison & spring shall blush a witty beat,
Lips, a divine teaser for physical intent,
I am the misty dawn at your feet,
Swirling sensations shall regard transparent,
Opus 5 will reveal this compelling identity,
Naughty, voluptuous, smothered with serenity,"

Lovly words written down, my favorite line had to be the third, it was beautiful. I would suggest at the last line, to place a period instead of your comma.

"Circle the aperture of a discovered faith,
Amplify my trust, a tender oath,
Ripple thou innocence of charming delight,
Eclaircise my anxiety & illuminate my growth,
You'll be my epiphany Tonight."

I believe that your love is uniting even more so with Alison in this piece, every heartbeat is being woven together, which fits perfectly if this is the finale. The only tiny thing that bothered me was how "Tonight" was capitalized, as I feel it has no need to, though you may capitalize "epiphany" for extra emphasis. Just my view though.

Thank you for the three reads, you will get very far, and never give up hope that you cannot do something, because you can.

~MA

"Eclaircise my anxiety & illuminate my growth,
You'll be my epiphany Tonight." These lines really stood out. Anyone in love would really like this because it's so appealing.