Comments : I'm Dating Myself

  • 14 years ago

    by KJ

    Great write. Even though it was short and simple, it said so much. You did a wonderful job with the rhyme. But I do have one suggestion:

    He's gone so long,
    I start to forget his face,
    But then he returns,
    Before he's fully erased

    ^^ I would do away with 'start to' in the second line. I just believe that the flow would be better that way.

    Overall, amazing job.
    5/5