Very sad and the last line strikes the reader so heavily, that it takes the wind out of them. this almost made me cry, you really dig far into the readers heart with this one, at least you did with mine. really dont know why but you really had that strong effect on me with your words. very nicely done.

It was a very sad story indeed. it was a bit hard for me to follow in some places because the lines ran into each other which gave it a weird flow.

but it was an interesting point of view that you gave. it never hurts to see things from another perspective. overall i thought it was well done. and the end gave it a good sense of feeling.

Another amazing piece from you, I really enoy your work when I can get time to read it lol, very powerful & sad at the same time. Flawless as always. 5/5, Em

Excellent poem, it's a twist and a bend from what you normally write but it's a Nik masterpiece

Nik, I absolutley LOVED this!! I like how it's a change from what you normally write. This one really struck me. It was a great poem. I just loved it. :)

Yes, I have read quite a few of your poems and this is different...a good different though. You did a great job with the ending, it is wat I liked most about it. Also, in all your works, I notice that you use your own format. And I love that. I am still trying to break out of the normal 'four line stanza' type poem. But overall, beautifully written Nik. 5/5 (you deserve nothing less). Great write.

Nik
What a very sad piece. The story you have put to verse really tugs at the heart.
Great job!
~hugs~
Cindy

This is a sad story that i relate to dear. I like it a lot. You and me write lots about sad love. Maybe not always sad.. but it feels sad even when its happy. Its strange to describe.

This was really heartbreaking but so beautiful to read. it had a ton of emotion and pain in the entire thing. great job!
"How could she forget
the special moments they
had once shared?
The laugher that is
now a few miniature
molecules in the back
of her throat"
awesome. :)

Love is such a hard thing to figure out and get used to. I mean once you find it and you're happy you can only help but think one day they'll be gone forever. I think it would be extremely hard to be around the person you love most in the world everyday watching them die, but thats definately love. I like this style you have here its like a free form of thoughts which is always good. Told a pretty strong story but a very true one at that. Nicely done worthy of a 5/5

Good job i can understand the pain and hurt in ur heart when u hit tht good job shanik i like it u do good

As you know I am new to this whole site, but I really loved this poem of yours, for it is raw emotion and touched my heart. I am excited to read some more of your stuff.

I didn't like how the stanzas were written. The different lines all over the place just didn't sit well with me.