WOW!!...I absolutely loved this this poem..Incredibly sad write, however I loved every bit of it. I loved the rhyme scheme, but then the one liners "be calm" , "inhale", I thought would break up what you had going on, but it actually made your poem so much more intriguing...I think many people could read this as it was the authors conscience telling him to be calm or a higher power....a poem that leaves you thinking is definitely a good one!
chelsey

An emotional roller coaster of a poem well metered and rhymed. unfortunately its theme is what life can bring and does to some and it will strike a cord in all those of us who have been there and managed to fight their way through. Only coward take the easy road life can be over just like the click of the fingers yet there is so much in front of us if we open our eyes. Excellent thought invoking and full of anger and passion 5/5 Ray S