Very nice poem. i like what you are trying to get at. all i would say for u to work on is ur fluidity. at some parts in the poem is seems like you just cut off the end. still it is a very good poem. i give it a 4/5. :):):):):)

Morgan :):):):):):):)

Thank you very much.
i'll try to improve on that.

Love feelings and a correct expression that comes from the bottom of the heart. Fascinating to see your lovely expressions and it sese nicely...

Shirani