The Ugly Duckling

by Lonely Rider   Jan 7, 2010


.................Its
...............voice,
...........a rhyme,a
..............charm,
................echo
................o..f
..............time
............forever
...........gone ,...........piercing into
...........bulky....stillness of night, crowned
............by the..solitude of silence, silhouettes
............and shadows ,dancing under an umbel of
.............darkness, ever so present. slowly it
..............swims, on a crystal lake, gentle breeze
................ruffles its silky silver feathers,
----- a soothing touch of relief, a refreshing smile------
..............The mirror couldn't hide, its bleeding
.............grief, an ending saga of ridicule, but
............it reflected...a courage... to survive,
............that even grey shades couldn't conquer.
............It was not just a reflection ,but an
.............image...........of its reality,
..............veiled
................under
.................a soul
..................hurt
...................but
.............pure.Will
...............she swim
...................out.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Minkus

    "a courage to survive/that even grey shades couldn't conquer.

    "a soul...hurt but pure./Will she swim out. "

    Those were some of my favorite quotes from the poem. Cool story, maybe feels a little incomplete, but honestly that's just an opinion. Nice write.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ducky Ramone

    Excellent poem 5/5. i love the way you wrote it to make a duck on water. :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Excellent word choice! Very unique...love the shape and structure of this piece! Great job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I know I've said this before...I just admire
    the way you do shape poetry!!! Have tried it
    several times but it has never come out right!
    Loved the read..excellent piece :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    Raj
    What a awesome piece. I loved the form and looking at the reflecting swans. The words were just as good :)
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy