Yes, I'll have to agree with Yaki. You do an amazing job incorporating religion and wisdom into your works.I love reading your poems not only because they are insightful, but also because they actually make me wonder/think about how life really is and how it should be. Very interesting poem.
5/5

Definitely not an optimistic poem to many downers in it build another future perhaps not build another start the future comes from them.
Good idea but slightly off for me a good poem which I think has missed the basic concept of life that of making the most of what you have and building on it I agree we most learn from past mistakes and grasp the concepts of our Saviour it was us that messed up his message of love and sacrifice. Build a new future must come by build a new start not easy. Ray S 4/5

This poem was very well written and it flowed really nicely, too. I think you did a really great job on writing it. You expressed yourself very well. 5/5

~Kristina

Where ancient civilizations sprang
Millenniums after the great big bang
^The rhyme here threw me off, for some reason it doesn't quite flow for me. I adore the idea but I'm not sure, perhaps it's the syllable count?

Adam you have had your Eve
Where Satan came to deceive
Yet a family from your blood
Would survive, in an ark, the flood
To build another future?
^I think now I know what was throwing me off lol, it's the syllable count in the first stanza. One the first, it was 10, 9, 9, 10, and this one it's 7, 7, 8, 8. Maybe try making the first stanza be either 10, 10, 9, 9 or 9, 9, 10, 10 so that it matches the rhyme scheme, like it does in this stanza. It helps with the flow.

From the rain that divinely fell
We built another well to hell
Babylonia where is your tower?
Do the stars hold the power?
To build another future?
^It's the same here, you're so close to getting the syllables to match. Check the last two lines *By the way, I've been ignoring the repetition because it doesn't include the rhyme scheme, though I love how you incorportated it*
Perhaps, "Is it the stars that hold the power?" would fit better?

In the era which began with Christ
Our lord and savior was sacrificed
The temple of God destroyed
As infinite mercy deployed
To build another future?
^It's here again, the last two lines. 9, 9, 7, 8.

Place another brick in the wall
As if they could save us all
Holy wars and holy orders
Just divide us into borders
To build another future?
^ The first two lines on this one.

If you do decide to change what I pointed out, then I think this poem will be phenomenal. That's the only flaw I found throughout it, and it's easy to fix. :) You have a lot of talent, and this poem was thought provoking, I enjoy those most, well done.

I was almost enchanted by the vocabulary, I must say.
The use of words like "myriad". It was extremely refreshing and powerful.

Loved the word choice and the rhyme scheme. This poem has an excellent rhythm. I really liked the repetition of the question at the end of each stanza. Great job!

A very pleasant read. You presented our history, like written in the bible, and asked the same simple question: Is it in order to build another future. At the end you finally said that the future we built, by bricks and cement, won't save us from what's there to come.
The rhyming was great, and the words you chose flew nicely. There was just one line that broke the flow a bit: "We built another well to hell" I'd right it in this matter: "We carved another hole to hell" - Just sounds better.

Overall great job, deserves a 5/5

Love your work!:)

Mostly, I enjoyed this poem. The rhyming wasn't boring or forced and at the same time, it made sense.

I had ONE small problem:
From the rain that divinely fell
We built another well to hell
Babylonia where is your tower
Is it the stars that hold the power?
To build another future?
^^^
In this stanza (and the rest of the poem, but I'm going to use this stanza as my example) it would have been MUCH stronger, had you used infliction/punctuation.

Here's how (written with punctuation/infliction/how I would have done it:
From the rain that divinely fell
We built another well to hell[.]
Babylonia where is your tower[?]
Is it the stars that hold the power[...]
To build another future?

And here's why:
The first two lines is a complete sentence, broken up for emphasis. The third line is a complete thought by itself and needs to be questioned (with a question mark) so that the LAST line can have the three dots I talked about in the first comment. It needs the three dots because, otherwise, the "to build another future" doesn't quite fit.

Does that make ANY sense at all? If you care to what I say and don't understand, you're welcome to message and ask and I'll try to be more elaborate.

So, inconclusion:
Thans for the comments.
I enjoyed most your poems, but some of them didn't sum up what writing abilites I know you have.
And finally, I enjoyed this last poem for the most part. Thank you for your time and take care.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5