The back porch

Another enigmatic poem of yours which invokes so much in its newness yet gets deep to your hidden thoughts. Wondering were this came from off the back porch perhaps ? 5/5 Ray S

Again, this is a reeally mysterious poem. I was kind of confused. lol But that's alright because it was very well written and it had a unique theme to it :)I also love the ending of this. I just thought it was a nice dramatic closing. Very great!

Thickets in while birds fly out
why do you cry
in the cold, still night
cigarette unsmoked in a haze

^Great description there. I also love the wording in this lovely beginning. "Cigarette unsmoked in a haze" ...they just sounded very powerful in this. I really liked that.

derelicts climb
into boxes of time
and it's filth
with drunks so obscene
and sirens agleam in their chase.

"derelicts climb into boxes of time"....you make those words sound so powerful in this poem. It just sends up chills. It's very pretty, actually :)

This was a very beautiful poem. I enjoyed the mystery of it.

Def 5/5

Excellent piece!!

Wow this was short, but it said so much in just a few words! You did a great job! I enjoyed reading it! 5/5

~Kristina

This well written poem reflects deep emotion with a very contemporary flavor