This poem is very powerful not only because of the great free flow, but because of your choice to personify a fetus. I find it very easy to get emotional involved in a cry to my soul

What an interesting and wonderful idea. To give a fetus a consious mind that understands the world, and its' pains. And sacrifice.
This is a very strong write. It pulls the reader to many levels. Very good work here. In fact, I'd rather say, awsome.

AMAZING PIECE!!! You have captured the message through this piece perfectly and have delivered to the readers flawlessly...I was hoping to read some really good stuff lately but I was disappointed until i read this piece of yours..Excellent job..

Very interesting, a strong way to drive home the point that abortion is not the cool rout to take. I really like how this in the prospective of the unborn child. It's so true that they never get the opportunity to voice their opinion on the matter. excellent poem. and I particularly REALLY dig the ending. very Slam dunk like.

Excellent write. You did an amazing job with using the voice of a fetus; a not yet born being. I would like to say that your choice to write a free-flow poem was perfect. There is not much else I can say, other than the emotion was portrayed throughout the entire piece. I loved it. 5/5

-KJ

Wow. By FAR. I think that this is your best work. The length surprised me but it kept me hooked throughout. Thats the best thing you can possibly do to a reader. From beginning to end it was amazing 5/5

Holy....crap!...

Give me one second, I have to pick my jaw up off the floor.

Karl, this was absolutel phanomonal!! I mean I feel like I have so much to say but I can't spit it out. All I could do was picture a fetus growing inside a moms stomach begging for life....Freedom Cries..That is one HELL of a title..the fact that you ended with that was just like BAM a huge slap in the face..I am Pro-Life and it was so encouraging to read this..Especially the part about I would die to protect you, how can you not protect me...That was BEAUTIFULLY written!

I am so happy to have come across your work. It truly deserves so much recognition!

Whoa that was intense. Very unique, very interesting approach to a touchy subject. The emotions displayed my the fetus in this piece are very interesting. It's very peculiar to think that a fetus can feel such intense emotion. Great Job!

Oh wow well first i have to say i love the message you portrayed im pro life and your poem says so much about how we think the child would think if they had a choice and how their chance is stolen and your portrayal of the mother is so in touch with alot of early moms these days you did an amazing job!!

Well it really doesn't read like a poem, but i like that about it. it sounds like a "soft rant" if you get what i'm saying. the last two lines "When you kill the one thing you love everything inside you dies, I'm just another aborted baby and you can't hear my Freedom Cries." are one of the best i've ever read. you did a great job

Awwwwww.... =( woooow! This poem is SOOO powerful, original and creative.... I LOVE IT!! So many babies are aborted and this poem really shows what these babies could feel (if they could feel things) and 'what could've been' for those expecting mothers... I realllly enjoyed this poem and its worth being published somewhere! It's inspiring and could hopefully help people make the right decision. Thank you for a wonderful poem and excellent job!!

Wow you are really writing some profound pieces hun. I love your love poems but this beats them all. I haven't read something so heart wrenching and image filled in a long time. This was a flawless piece. Yours words not only speak the truth that happens every day everywhere but it shows the pain from both sides. The struggle people go through and the horrible affects. More people need to read this simply because it's real. Very well done. Nik

It is a very powerful piece makes me want to slap the crap out the mom.that might just be because im pregnant.Great poem.

The so deep...i donu u left me speechless..with too much on my mind..poor my 19 years old mind lol realy im in love in this idea and the thoughts u in sighted deeply here...
anyway
5/5 nice to read ur work!

Wow. i actually had tears in my eyes. It makes you really see the other side of the story. Ive always been pro-choice and will always be...but you didnt a powerful write. Something i believe people should read.
lovely job.

victoria

Thats deep... what i don't get is how can a guy like you be such a good poet??