This was amazing. i really love the flow of the words and just the storyline itself. it's completely heartbreaking and beautiful. greta job! :) would you please read mine? "put to rest"

I liked how simple this was. Straight to the point without all of those complex words and forms. I think people will get this more because you're feelings were intense and real and ones that people could relate to. Everyone wants to be loved and have someone care about them and be there and it's hard to understand why we lose those things or never have them to begin with. I think your words are very profound and let people see that they aren't alone. Nik

Excellent word choice, throughout the piece. "Where we have absolutely no control,
Just pawns in a game they wish to play" this was my favourite line. Keep up the good work

Enjoyed the read your word choice was fantastic, i loved how it was simple yet it drew you in. a excellent read

I really like this poem well I like all your poems I think that you are a very amazing writer I can always relate to what you write.