'Dreams
that seem so perfectly real'
^Didn't really like 'so perfectly real' - maybe try Dreams that seem realistic - not sure, up to you with this one.
'I wrap my body in sheets
of solitary and think of how'
^Solitary would sound better as solitude.
'in the mist of her overcast
of sunny rays of sparkling
radiance.'
^I feel like you used of way too much here & it kind of threw me off. I dont know if you really need both sunny rays & sparkling radiance, both refer to the same thing - sparkling radiance may sound better.
I liked this poem but then certain parts didn't. I thought overall the emotion was well expressed & your thoughts connected well just some parts that threw me off. Other than that a nice job.
NIk
The feelings of being alone. especially at night can be felt strongly in your words. It is so hard when feelings of love aren't returned.
Great job!
Take Care
Cindy