Comments : He will never know

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Like they say love is blind & they let the good
    love slip from their fingers...but you know,
    a love better then this will come to you :)
    take care..

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    'Dreams
    that seem so perfectly real'
    ^Didn't really like 'so perfectly real' - maybe try Dreams that seem realistic - not sure, up to you with this one.

    'I wrap my body in sheets
    of solitary and think of how'
    ^Solitary would sound better as solitude.

    'in the mist of her overcast
    of sunny rays of sparkling
    radiance.'
    ^I feel like you used of way too much here & it kind of threw me off. I dont know if you really need both sunny rays & sparkling radiance, both refer to the same thing - sparkling radiance may sound better.

    I liked this poem but then certain parts didn't. I thought overall the emotion was well expressed & your thoughts connected well just some parts that threw me off. Other than that a nice job.

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    NIk
    The feelings of being alone. especially at night can be felt strongly in your words. It is so hard when feelings of love aren't returned.
    Great job!
    Take Care
    Cindy