There was a lot of emotion in this write. I have read a few of your poems, and they all are filled with voice and imagery. You have done a great job with your choice of description here. I wouldn't change a thing about it. As you said in the Author's Note, you were just writing what you were feeling; so no change needs to be done. Overall, very beautiful write. I wouldn't dare give this anything less than a 5.

Great write.
-KJ