Comments : No Sunshine Breaks

  • 14 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Excellent job with this piece truly great 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    Moving on don't look back
    Sunny skies dressed in black
    Try to keep my held held high
    But everyday I wonder why
    No sunshine breaks........
    ^^^
    Rachel your 2 beginning lines stand out and make the reader feel your words deeply.
    3rd line I think you mean "head held high"

    This piece is so touching Rachel. I hope your sunshine comes soon my friend ~hugs~

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Thank you for your comments.

    Lu, yes you are right, that was a typo. Thanks:)