Damn, I am speechless... This piece is magnificient, this is by far my most favorite by you...

Picture painting imagery! What a nice word choice and flow. I like how the poem doesn't rhyme until the last stanza and then you have an internal rhyme in one line and then the end rhymes....it makes the rhythm memorable. Creative metaphors. Great job on this one!

Great use of metaphores and imagination! Flowed from beginning to end...another great write.