Its hard to grasp what this poem is really about as it does not have much depth of feeling in it... or at least the feelings weren't quite explained clearly, but you were very descriptive of the things around the character.

keep up the good work. i hope to read from you soon :)
~Kuro

It was like you going into a dream, dreaming about your love..that was what I got. It had a dreamy atmosphere with the feelings the heart would get when in love..good write :)